This piece was done as contest submission for "This way for the gas, ladies and gentlemen" by Tadeusz Borrowski.
The book is a compilation of short stories about the authors experience in Auschwitz. I always appreciate your feedback
and that's why I'm here. I tried to keep everything very loose as I am trying to move my work in a certain direction.
Hope you guys like it.
The book is a compilation of short stories about the authors experience in Auschwitz. I always appreciate your feedback
and that's why I'm here. I tried to keep everything very loose as I am trying to move my work in a certain direction.
Hope you guys like it.
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cool stuff man! Cool thing I'm seeing that was maybe intended or not is the specks in the white around the shoes look kind of like dirt or debris in or on top of snow. Personally I would play that up a bit more. I like the way that you already have a very direct message with just the shoes and smoke as if the person just evaporated, but what if this person were simply walking around on snow covered grounds and at that moment were selected to immediately go to the gas chamber? Just something to think about, love what you've got now though. good work.
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